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    Grade my ielts writing task2

    We face lot of global problems. Good relations b/w nations is important. Agree or not


    i have just given my ielts exam..it was my second time..in the first i got 6.5 in writing and i require 7..here is what i have written in my recent ielts essay..please check it and tell me if i ll get 7 or not.


    handsome relations between countries has always been in demand.Due to enumerous problems which human beings are confronting right now,there has been an upsurge in people who advocate good relations between different countries.Although many people think that every country has to solve its problems on its own,i am of belief that its not possible without the help of other countries.

    Today,we face problems like global warming and terrorism which are having a deterring effect on our society.there are various global organisations which are working towards eradicating these issues but it can't be possible without commadory and harmony between different nations.For instance,india and pakistan ,both are victims of terrorism but instead of channeling the resources in the right way,both are playing the blame game.

    Furthermore,poverty is prevalant in most of the countries and elimination of poverty is their top agenda.For this,it is pivotal to create good relations between developing and develop nations like usa and uk,that can result in plethora of financial assistance to the poverty hit countries .

    Having said that,it must be acknowledged that pride and integrity of the country is of utmost importance and it can't be compromised with,just for the sake of having good ties with other countries.

    In the end,it would be appropriate to mention that having good relations with other countries is the need of the hour,to ensure that world is devoid of various deterimental issues and problems which are being faced by humans in the current scenario.

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    I am not any sort of IELTS English expert but your writing does not look good, it is less than 250 words and full of punctuation and spelling mistakes .. this won't get you the required 7 in writing module of IELTS.
    Pass it through a spellchecker and you will see that what I mean.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Admin View Post
    I am not any sort of IELTS English expert but your writing does not look good, it is less than 250 words and full of punctuation and spelling mistakes .. this won't get you the required 7 in writing module of IELTS.
    Pass it through a spellchecker and you will see that what I mean.
    I agree with you , your advices are so nice.

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    ya you are right admin...Improve Language please...

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    Points to Note

    Hi,
    I am an online English teacher helping students prepare for IELTS well. Varun, here are some tips:
    1. General statements come in the beginning of the paragraphs and not as the second or fifth sentence. For the IELTS essay writing, remember that every body paragraph has a separate theme. Start the para. with a general statement, give an explanation as the next sentence, followed by its details and examples. Finally, conclude it by linking it to the main point of this para.
    2. Your choice of words matter a lot- "handsome relations" is a bad version of "healthy relations"; "enumerous problems" is incorrect- call it "innumerable".
    3. In the Introduction paragraph, talk more about your opinion and less about people's belief system.
    For online help on the Writing tasks,

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